Sunday, March 10, 2013

Haiku Monday 3/11: Bloom




This week's theme is "bloom".

Come and play, and bring your fellow wordsmiths along!

Required:

Structure: 5-7-5  syllable pattern
Kigo: Seasonal reference
Kireji: Cutting word establishing a correspondance between the two images it separates.

Optional: Image

As many entries as you like; please indicate two for judging.

Deadline is 11:59 Pacific Time, Monday, March 11.

Good luck!

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45 comments:

  1. RebeccaMarch 10, 2013 at 1:53 PM

    here are my entries

    kneeling at the white throne
    butterflies swoosh and flutter
    a life blooms inside

    scribbles of color
    rainbows and lollipops swirl
    an artist emerges

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    1. czarMarch 10, 2013 at 5:44 PM

      Now if I had written "kneeling at the white throne," I'd never hear the end of it from your gracious hostess.

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    2. FleurdeleoMarch 11, 2013 at 4:58 PM

      Very nice, Becca! Somehow, you made white throne sound very un-terlet like.

      Very true, Csar.

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  5. JennyMarch 10, 2013 at 6:27 PM

    I should be up later with a visual:

    Century old frienship,
    broken by life's circumstances,
    old friends walk the sea

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    1. FleurdeleoMarch 11, 2013 at 5:01 PM

      Great my dear--and while you're at it, you may want to count your syllables. I'll give you "centch-ry" in line one; but you must address line two! Nice theme, though.

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  6. czarMarch 11, 2013 at 4:39 AM

    [cutting word or punctuation, please]

    StuffitLeopold.
    Youtoo, Molly. Brooks's Bloom --
    A Wilder "Springtime."

    Footnotes:

    1. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Leopold_Bloom

    2. http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0063462/fullcredits?ref_=tt_ov_st_sm#cast

    3. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K08akOt2kuo

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    1. FleurdeleoMarch 11, 2013 at 5:07 PM

      Csar, of course cutting punctuation counts, too. But you still need the correct syllables in line two...yes?

      Nice stuffing of action in one little haiku. Nice use of footnotes, too-although I could've lived without the description of mutton kidneys given off a scent of urine. That's why you have a bad rap for the occasional lapse in classiness for all your complexity.

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    2. czarMarch 11, 2013 at 6:08 PM

      Fleur, Fleur, Fleur: I sit here most weeks drumming away with my fingertips like an OCD chef checking to make sure the burner is turned off to make sure I have the correct number of syllables. I do it before, during, and after submission. I toss and turn counting 5, 7, 5. It affects my every waking moment. I hear snippets of speech during the week and think, "Hmm, 5."

      But since you brought it up, I decided to go with Chicago Manual of Style punctuation to allow the "s" after the apostrophe, as opposed to Associated Press style. The "s" creates another syllable: Brooks-ehz.

      Note to self: Fleur actually reads the footnotes. Next time, cite the whole f()cking Ulysses.

      Love ya, Fleur, but my Wikipedia citation doesn't trump the haiku image of someone talking on the big white phone, as sweet as it is. Primary reference vs. secondary reference and all that.

      I'm in the middle of my third book in the last month on war crimes and genocide. I'm feeling particularly authoritarian and czarish at the moment, as you've discovered too late.

      Fleur, Fleur, Fleur . . . Making me work at Haiku Monday.

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  7. AnonymousMarch 11, 2013 at 5:33 AM

    now:

    The first bloom of spring?
    Shy flowers from under snow?
    Not so much -- slime molds!

    Serendipity

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    1. FleurdeleoMarch 11, 2013 at 5:09 PM

      Ohhhh, this took a sudden turn south! I like the shy flowers better. But a sudden turn can work in one's favor, yes??

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  8. AnonymousMarch 11, 2013 at 7:58 AM

    Thanks for the invite, Fleur. Since the gardening bug has bit the wife bad, I should try to think of something for this, but not sure. We'll see. Loved Becca's first, tho!

    GG

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    1. FleurdeleoMarch 11, 2013 at 5:09 PM

      Well, it's nice to have you drop by, anyway!

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  9. darkfoamMarch 11, 2013 at 3:48 PM

    Night shadows unfurl.

    Evanescent lights flicker..

    Fireflies whoop, "hump night!"

    (I'm not up yet, but will probably be with youtube video for "making whoopy". I will let you know.

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  10. KarlMarch 11, 2013 at 4:46 PM

    Good evening Fleur,

    Congratulations on your win! You, our wistful expert on matters of the heart.

    I submit two for your review. The first is really the only one to judge. Unfortunately the second one is what I think of when someone mentions bloom.

    Youthful beauty blooms
    Yet to fade with time and trial
    Bring grace and wisdom

    Dinoflagellate
    aquatic microorganisms
    Harmful algae bloom

    @ Boxer and Foam: It's so nice to see you both competing.


    Good luck to all.

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    1. FleurdeleoMarch 11, 2013 at 5:14 PM

      Hi, Karl! Extremely poignant subject matter; I particularly like "yet to fade with time and trial" though I am skeptical of the use of "trial" as one syllable.

      I read your second one outloud and sounded very intelligent!

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  11. RafaelMarch 11, 2013 at 4:46 PM

    Fleur:

    You may be right, a Renaissance it IS:

    I have a couple for ya'. First is a birthday 'ku for me mum:

    Winter winds from north
    Subside. Flowers burst to bloom
    Born at cusp of Spring

    & second is an ode to the sweet smells of SPRING:

    Blushing with sun's light
    Pregnant flora's wakening
    Births the coming SPRING!!

    Your love poison is always a WINNER!!! Congrats!!

    Rafa

    P.S. Oh, and I'm actually UP

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    1. FleurdeleoMarch 11, 2013 at 5:17 PM

      Thank you, Rafa! So nice to see you here. Your entries are graceful and very stirrin!

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  12. darkfoamMarch 11, 2013 at 5:13 PM

    Eventide's moonbeam..

    Shimmers on glistening shaft

    Wilting happily...

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  13. czarMarch 11, 2013 at 6:24 PM

    Well, dammit, Fleur. You've gotten under my skin such that I had to try to go traditional:

    Bright bursts foretasting
    Spring! Heralded arriving,
    Silence when they fall.

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  14. AnonymousMarch 11, 2013 at 6:33 PM

    Nice turnout so far Fleur. Here is my second. Been a little preoccupied...

    A spring blooms with hope
    when Mom called today. "I'm home...
    The hip is solid!"

    I do have one visual up now. http://serendipitouswildmoments.wordpress.com/

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  15. darkfoamMarch 11, 2013 at 6:39 PM

    okay, i'm up. hello to everybody. turnout is good! and i do want to add: congratulations on your latest win! i wasn't surprised in the least. this was fun indeed. and look! there's rafa!

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  16. fishyMarch 11, 2013 at 6:50 PM

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  17. fishyMarch 11, 2013 at 7:06 PM

    What blooms within grief?
    Surely ... that first sprig of hope,
    love does survive death.

    Rose blooms on my cheeks
    spawned my Summer memories
    of ocean brined flesh

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  18. Aunty BelleMarch 11, 2013 at 7:48 PM

    Foamy!! Tsk, tsk.

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  19. Aunty BelleMarch 11, 2013 at 9:46 PM


    Great turn out Fleur--fun.

    I'se up wif visuals @
    http://ethercapacious.blogspot.com/2013/03/haiku-mondaybloom.html


    His chill morning kiss
    Burned: Scarlet efflorescence
    Stained thy cheek...with shame.



    'Midst Autumn's moldy
    Witherings of lost glory,
    Hope! Amaryllis.

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  20. fishyMarch 12, 2013 at 4:53 AM

    Did I mention I'm up with visuals?

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  21. RafaelMarch 12, 2013 at 2:32 PM

    Not sure which was most arousing, Foam's 'ku, Czar's "authoritarian moment" or the whole Czar/Fleur spar...either way; YOWZAA...SO HOT!D

    Fleur:
    You certainly know how to heat up a room...it's sultry in here

    Rafa:D

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  22. KarlMarch 12, 2013 at 4:24 PM

    Good evening Fleur,

    A fine performance by everyone.

    I should've checked my dictionary. However it decided to wing it instead. Please accept this edit.

    Youthful beauty blooms
    Yet fade with time and trial
    Bring grace and wisdom

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  23. chickoryMarch 13, 2013 at 6:13 AM

    Nice turnout Fleur! I'll be back on board next week. Im partial to Foamys and Aunty's this week. that first one by Aunty is very intriguing. not sure I get it but the visual is great. Good luck Judging and congratulations on your win last week

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  24. AnonymousMarch 16, 2013 at 6:51 PM

    Does anyone know who won?

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  25. RebeccaMarch 18, 2013 at 1:39 PM

    was a winner chosen

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  26. AnonymousMarch 18, 2013 at 2:37 PM

    Good evening contestants,
    Sure, there is a winner. Yet we may have to wait to find out who it is. You see, you never know when our dear Fleur. Has to take off and put on her alter a identity. Yes... She is likely off saving New York in her role as Cougar Cop, along with her hunky sidekick Sergeant Biff Bicep. Hitting the streets, fighting crime, and having erotic interludes with the young studs she meets along the way.

    So be patient, I'm sure there's a good reason.

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    1. FleurdeleoMarch 19, 2013 at 2:44 PM

      Thank you for that vote of confidence! I like your version much better than the reality...but standby for the Announcement of the Winner.

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  27. fishyMarch 18, 2013 at 4:23 PM

    Fleur,
    Hope all is well and you are indeed having a breath taking adventure of great personal import. If we miss a weeks game....well there are other forms of entertainment.

    If your delay is not about high adventure but something more worrisome then Godspeed my friend.

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    1. FleurdeleoMarch 19, 2013 at 2:45 PM

      Thank you so much, Fishy! Did not mean to make my friends worry--but I had a very demanding conference surprise me half way through my write up--so couldn't back up! Stand by for the next post.

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  28. darkfoamMarch 19, 2013 at 11:51 AM

    Hope all is well..



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  29. darkfoamMarch 19, 2013 at 11:51 AM

    Hope all is well..



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  30. czarMarch 19, 2013 at 4:13 PM

    She is risen indeed.

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  31. AnonymousMarch 21, 2013 at 4:08 PM

    Hi All. The winner is in the next post! Leap ahead.

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