Friday, May 27, 2011

Haiku Monday: Cliche

Cracked heart on my sleeve.
You could save me, but withhold.
Like "Little Foxes."




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7 comments:

  1. czarMay 29, 2011 at 3:37 PM

    Hunter S. Thompson with a capsule of powdered LSD mistakenly spilled on his shirtsleeve comes to mind. I don't think this relates to your verse, though.

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  2. FleurdeleoMay 29, 2011 at 4:02 PM

    Really? Well, have you ever seen "Little Foxes?" Bette Davis's character allows her scheming estranged husband to die of a heart attack by withholding his heart medicine (presumably nitroglycerine, picture above.)

    When one has a broken heart, the beloved's withholding his love is as devastating as someone witholding medicine from a physical ailment. "Heart on my sleeve" is the cliche.

    I believe this haiku makes straightforward connections. Of course, Troll didn't get your haiku either. So maybe you and I are simply writers of more complex haiku in keeping with our soulful and sophisticated personas.

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  3. czarMay 29, 2011 at 4:12 PM

    I wasn't trying to comment on your haiku, per se. Just indicating what misfired synapses it engaged. The problem is all mine.

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  4. moiMay 29, 2011 at 4:49 PM

    Oo, oo! I got it! Good one, girl.

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  5. pamMay 30, 2011 at 10:08 AM

    Oooooh, first time I've been over here to visit, and must admit I didn't get the haiku at first. But your explanation with your profile, and I think there's the making of a good Cougar Cop novel, and I'm buying a first run edition. Fun Fun.

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  6. FleurdeleoMay 30, 2011 at 11:02 AM

    Moi, thank you! And, Pam, too!

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  7. chickoryMay 30, 2011 at 5:13 PM

    i remember this movie. bette davis makes a great villain. Good haiku. Happy Haiku Monday!

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